
Original:The team makes so many sacrifices to get to this position. They give up time with friends, family, and time to do other things that they enjoy. The fans add so much to how well teams do. If you have supportive fans, they feed into the energy of players. If the fans are always there cheering and supporting the team, then the team will produce for their fans. They get a lot of money, and the owners get a lot of money. If they win the get sponsors, free trips, free stuff.
Rewrite: Professional athletes make a huge sacrifice when they choose to play a sport for a career. Although they make an incredible amount of money, some of the things that go along with it aren't so glamorous. They give up chances to do the other things in life that they enjoy including: spending time with family, friends, hobbies, and relaxing. They are constantly practicing, or on the road for games. Fans also play a huge role in the outcome that the team has. If fans are committed and dedicated to their sports team, it makes the athletes want to preform well for them. They form a relationship and a bond that cant be broken. Athletes, coaches, and franchise owners do make an incredible amount of money. If the team wins the world series, they get some many more awesome things other than just a huge paycheck. They get gifts, sponsors, vacations, parades, and many other incredible things.